While your original sentence is grammatically correct, the combination of future tense (“will lead”) and future perfect tense (“will have raised”) makes it feel a bit clunky for business or financial journalism.
Here are a few ways to rewrite it for better flow, clarity, and professional tone, depending on your needs:
Option 1: Clear and Journalistic (Recommended)
“SBI’s digital assets subsidiary is leading a funding round expected to raise approximately $30 million for the Swiss firm over a six-month period.” Why it works: Changing “will lead” to “is leading” and “will have raised” to “expected to raise” is the standard, natural phrasing used in financial news for ongoing funding rounds.
Option 2: Concise and Punchy
“SBI’s digital assets subsidiary will lead a $30 million funding round for the Swiss firm, to be completed over six months.” Why it works: It removes the wordy “round that will have raised” and gets straight to the point.
Option 3: Action-Oriented
“Led by SBI’s digital assets subsidiary, the funding round is on track to raise around $30 million for the Swiss firm over the next six months.” Why it works: Starting with the subsidiary emphasizes the lead investor, which is often the most important detail in venture capital news.
💡 Pro-Tips for Context:
- Name the entities: If this is the opening sentence (the “lede”) of an article or press release, you should name the specific firms. For example: “SBI Digital Asset Holdings is leading a funding round expected to raise $30 million for [Name of Swiss Firm]…”
- “Around” vs. “Approximately”: In formal financial writing, “approximately” or “an estimated” is often preferred over “around,” though “around” is perfectly fine for more casual business blogs or newsletters.
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